➡ First story I have read here that is actually a real story. I’ll look for more, Anita –Sage
➡ This would make a great short story for “tweens” age group. –Cynth’ya
➡ well done –MJ Hollingshead
➡ Love it! I used to own a horse and I love these kinds of stories, even though I’m a ‘big kid’ now –Chrissy
➡ I love this peice! You captured the excitement, the nerves, the danger of bronco riding perfectly! It grabbed my attention and refused to let if go until the very end. I was hanging onto every word and itching for the next to see what happened! WELL DONE!!!!
I saw 2 things.
You had rated this an E, but hell is considered a bad word to some.
“Hell, if he ain’t the stamp and that bronc’s a love letter . . . !”
You forgot a bracket.
off, landing on his feet, a little dazed but elated.
indent}”Now he’s got the hang of it, he don’t wanna get off! Brilliant ride, Eli! You’re the man! See if the judges feel the same
Just those 2 little things are the only things I noticed. Keep up the great work!
I have since fixed the missing closing quotes . . . brackets are completely different item.
About the use of Hell. Say it in churches, don’t they? Ah, well . . . I suppose I get her point . . .